Nice rhyme in this one, not just the obvious “crunches/birches” but also “crunches/amongst.” I know rhyme isn’t what haiku is about, but I appreciate it occasionally.
This is an interesting issue. People have commented a few times about my use of “half-rhymes”. I don’t try to rhyme (or not rhyme), but I do have a preference for certain rhythms and sounds. I guess if it happens naturally, it won’t feel forced in a haiku (or what I am calling haiku!).
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Nice rhyme in this one, not just the obvious “crunches/birches” but also “crunches/amongst.” I know rhyme isn’t what haiku is about, but I appreciate it occasionally.
This is an interesting issue. People have commented a few times about my use of “half-rhymes”. I don’t try to rhyme (or not rhyme), but I do have a preference for certain rhythms and sounds. I guess if it happens naturally, it won’t feel forced in a haiku (or what I am calling haiku!).
Thanks for the feedback.
Good one, again
i saw a photo recently, and it looked lovely…
wishes,
devika
Yes, I do love the elegance of birches, especially when surrounded by snow.