Dear Ken, For me this one doesn’t quite work, because the connection between the two parts doesn’t click. Any other observation of natural beauty could go with “deadlines loom” (and often does, in my experience!) and the poem would be pretty much the same. What paticular moment of nature, or way of expressing that moment, makes the looming deadlines particularly vivid, or painful, or meaningless, or, now that we come down to it, not so important after all? 🙂
Nicely done.
Dear Ken,
For me this one doesn’t quite work, because the connection between the two parts doesn’t click. Any other observation of natural beauty could go with “deadlines loom” (and often does, in my experience!) and the poem would be pretty much the same.
What paticular moment of nature, or way of expressing that moment, makes the looming deadlines particularly vivid, or painful, or meaningless, or, now that we come down to it, not so important after all? 🙂
Late spring —
Summer’s dress rehearsal
canceled
ken, dont listen to the kris, your poem was amazingly written! It worked very well for me! I would love to read more poems that you have written. (:
Sad Snow turns to ice
Snow on dead branches
Quickly falls, loneliness comes
Leaking crystal tears
your poem was great! it inspired me to write this:)
I thought it was………AWESOME!!!!
It has the wrong amount of syllables. It’s 5-7-5. Otherwise, it’s great!