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  • Ken Wagner Feb 13, 2009 @ 22:24

    Was –
    Snow melts
    on a flat street –
    Indifference

  • devika Feb 14, 2009 @ 21:57

    You got that feeling?
    Street or field, melting snow conveys warmth —
    I mean the idea — I have never seen snow or snow melting 🙂

    wishes,
    devika

  • Ken Wagner Feb 14, 2009 @ 22:19

    You are correct, Devika. Too abstract. Let me try another revision. Thanks for pushing.

    Was –
    Snow melts
    on a flat field –
    Indifference

  • Dave Bonta Feb 14, 2009 @ 22:35

    I like this.

  • Caroline Feb 15, 2009 @ 0:53

    this website is great. <3 the haiku overdose.

  • gautami tripathy Feb 16, 2009 @ 11:08

    in the warmth
    of my thought
    snow melted outside

  • Ken Wagner Feb 16, 2009 @ 17:09

    Thanks, Dave and Caroline.

    Gautami – I like the poem very much. For some reason, I think “melts” may work better than “melted”. Cheers!

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