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  • Ken Wagner Dec 12, 2008 @ 19:55

    Was –
    Seagulls
    need wind. Wind is
    indifferent.

  • Kris Dec 13, 2008 @ 10:39

    this 2nd version seems better as haiku.
    For two more bird haiku check out my follower/followed Sid Kemp (full disclosure: my husband 🙂 ). One of them does sort of the opposite in relating birds to nature, making it anything but indifferent.
    Both work.

  • Ken Wagner Dec 13, 2008 @ 20:53

    Yep, I knew as soon as I pushed “Publish” that it was philosophy, not haiku. But – full disclosure! – I did not want to erase the process, so I put the original in the Comments section.

    I hope to preserve this focus on process and growth as the Haiku Habits site moves forward.

    Thanks for the feedback, as well as the tip about your husband’s posts!

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