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  • Adriaan Nov 26, 2008 @ 6:31

    Wet sock steps scratch? I don’t get it…

  • Ken Wagner Nov 26, 2008 @ 20:28

    Original –

    Rain taps, taps.
    Wet sock steps
    scratch.

    New version better?

  • Adriaan Nov 27, 2008 @ 3:00

    I don’t know. Why aren’t you wearing your shoes in the rain? And what do your socks scratch?

    I don’t see wet wool scratching anything at all really, it would seem more like soft and spongy to me.

  • Ken Wagner Nov 27, 2008 @ 20:21

    Spongy, yes, but I had been walking for an hour in cold rain and my wet socks were definitely scratchy! But they were cotton, not wool, so maybe that will help. Honesty, honesty.

    Was
    Rains falling.
    My wet woolen socks
    scratch.

  • Adriaan Nov 28, 2008 @ 3:19

    Okay, sorry, I really didn’t get the scratching thing. Maybe because I have water proof shoes. :p

    About honesty, I think it’s totally okay to change the events to suit your haiku. It’s about how best to get your feeling across, so if the image needs sharpening… If you saw and heard two birds, but one bird works better, one bird it is. Etc.

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