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  • Bill Feb 9, 2009 @ 21:55

    “searching for motion” is an interesting way of seeing/saying it.

  • Dave Bonta Feb 9, 2009 @ 22:26

    Yeah, what Bill said. A nice double meaning there.

  • haikuexpeditions Feb 10, 2009 @ 9:56

    very well done! love it. 1 image multiple emotions.

  • Ken Wagner Feb 10, 2009 @ 21:16

    This one seemed to flow well for both sound and meaning.

    Responding to Bill’s suggestion about the two-part structure of haiku, I’m finding that the two parts may come from the “double meaning” that Dave points out.

    Is double-meaning a way – to haiku?

  • comrade harps Feb 11, 2009 @ 20:37

    motion and motionless (expressed as motion) – lovely.

  • Ken Wagner Feb 12, 2009 @ 20:33

    comrade harps – Thanks!

  • Pat Feb 19, 2009 @ 18:55

    I have featured this haiku on my website:
    Haiku

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