The hawk
circles back as the squirrels
bicker.
Hawks
do not care
for haiku.
Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits
Inspired by Coming From The Woods and commentary
The hawk
circles back as the squirrels
bicker.
Hawks
do not care
for haiku.
Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits
Inspired by Coming From The Woods and commentary
It may well be true
That hawks don’t care for haiku –
Too spiritual!?:)
P.s. Hawks or haiku, or both?!:)
Even 17 syllables is too long, for a hawk!
Was –
The hawk
turns as the squirrels
bicker.
Changed “turns” to “circles back” in line 2
For hawks of haiku
the seventeen syllables
is a true bird-cage!?:)
Circles back works better.
BTW, the hawks in the human world too don’t care for haiku. For that matter any kind if poetry. Maybe they should…
like it
Borut – Clever image. May your cage door remain ajar!
gautami tripathy – Thank you for the feedback. I am trying to improve in my practice. If you ever have a suggestion, please share.
I agree that poetry has its place amongst the hawks. Poetry can soar or scurry. We choose.
harps Thanks! – again and again!