Hawk Circles | Birds haiku poem example | 020909

A hawk circles,
silently searching
for motion.

Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits

7 comments… add one

Bill Feb 9, 2009 @ 21:55
“searching for motion” is an interesting way of seeing/saying it.
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Dave Bonta Feb 9, 2009 @ 22:26
Yeah, what Bill said. A nice double meaning there.
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haikuexpeditions Feb 10, 2009 @ 9:56
very well done! love it. 1 image multiple emotions.
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Ken Wagner Feb 10, 2009 @ 21:16
This one seemed to flow well for both sound and meaning.
Responding to Bill’s suggestion about the two-part structure of haiku, I’m finding that the two parts may come from the “double meaning” that Dave points out.
Is double-meaning a way – to haiku?
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comrade harps Feb 11, 2009 @ 20:37
motion and motionless (expressed as motion) – lovely.
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Ken Wagner Feb 12, 2009 @ 20:33
comrade harps – Thanks!
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Pat Feb 19, 2009 @ 18:55
I have featured this haiku on my website:
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