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  • Gerald Dec 23, 2008 @ 10:35

    delicious
    a nicely succint metaphor but underlying resonations too

  • Ken Wagner Dec 23, 2008 @ 12:02

    Was –
    Curved mountains
    covered in clouds –
    The small of her back.

    I think “hills” works better. Any thoughts?

  • Ken Wagner Dec 23, 2008 @ 20:32

    Gerald – Glad you liked it. Thanks for the feedback!

  • hraps Dec 28, 2008 @ 23:45

    See it, feel it, love it.

  • Ken Wagner Dec 29, 2008 @ 19:33

    Thank you. I am fond of this one.

  • Adriaan Jan 1, 2009 @ 12:27

    Wouldn’t “your back” be better?

  • Ken Wagner Jan 1, 2009 @ 22:22

    “Your back” would better suggest the intimacy of an encounter, but this was more a moment of recollection. I was on the road, driving into the mountains.

    Plus, I’m not sure she would have appreciated my breaking an intimate moment to compare her to the hills, no matter how lovely!

  • Adriaan Jan 2, 2009 @ 5:10

    I see what you mean, but still there is a distance I don’t think really is there in your mind when you think about someone in that way.

    Ah well.

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